It is nighttime:
A boy walks on a road:
He sees a figure:
He feels happy:
In the nighttime the moon lit up the outer space and you could hardly see all the buildings which looked like a blur. The boy slowly moves down the harshly lit street. “ Where is my dad?”
The boy watched a faint, dark figure pass by as he
starts to wonder why the figure looks like his father. He springs back down the street towards the figure and his father that he thought was dead was standing right in front on him.
He feels ecstatic but also angry because it was four years since the day he saw him and waited so long and he didn’t come back to him the day he left and thought he was dead but no.
Hi leah Hannah here I am just saying your wrighting is of your page and it is hard to read. But I still read it it is amazing.
ReplyDeleteHi Leah, its me Sophie from Awahono School. I really like how you have described and really made these sentances a lot better. Maybe next time you could try and do ctrl shift c when you patse beacuse it is annoying how it goes off the page. Overall it was really impressive.
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Sophie